I put up a fuss, but finally took my fellow authors advice and changed up my chapter to soften the main character, Ava, a bit. This time they said the scenes flowed together much smoother. Some weren’t crazy about Ava’s naivete about the antagonist at the end of the chapter, but trust me, it
did can happen.
Our writer’s group is not a class or a course on writing, yet I learn so much with each meeting. I found it strange how I caught a couple of sentences that weren’t quite technically well-written in their submissions, but couldn’t find them in my own. This is why their input is so vital to my writing. I’m too close to my own work and can’t always see the missing pieces, or sometimes … too many pieces.
It’s important to tell each other constructively how a sentence is awkward, or how something doesn’t seem to fit. Sometimes it’s helpful to give an example as to how a sentence might come together smoother. The writer can then take it from there and rearrange as they see fit.